RWH: Clue

Matilda’s face turned scarlet. She looked around the small classroom, twelve other children her age sitting in a semi-circle, Miss Jenny in a chair at the head. All eyes were on her.

“Matilda…” Miss Jenny prodded her gently. Matilda looked at her teacher with glassy eyes. The young teacher suddenly realized the little girl was about to cry. “Alright class. Let’s give Matilda a few minutes. Hector, you’re next.”

Matilda felt even worse. She felt like she might be sick, like the time she ate too much candy at Delia’s birthday party and threw up all over the couch.

As Hector started to introduce himself, Matilda stood quickly.

“MissJennymayIpleasegototherestroom?” She said all in one breath, hardly waiting for the nod from Miss Jenny before rushing out of the classroom.

Once in the quiet hallway, a breeze combing her long hair, Matilda felt her tummy settle. She started walking, but not in the direction of the restroom. Instead, she headed towards the library.

She peeked inside and saw the librarian, Miss Christine, sitting behind a desk stacked with books. Last year, she had enjoyed spending her recess at the library with Miss Christine. Miss Christine didn’t have a mother either. She understood Matilda better than anyone else at school. Once, Miss Christine had let Matilda go through the trinkets she kept on her desk. She had turned the tiny candlestick in her fingers, recognizing it from her father’s favorite board game.

It had been Miss Christine’s mom’s favorite board game too.


This piece was written as a part of my fictional work-in-progress, Finding Agnes. You can find more from Finding Agnes here.

Red Writing Hood is a weekly writing meme from the Write on Edge community. Constructive criticism is appreciated.

This week’s Red Writing Hood prompt: In honor of the classic Hasbro game [Clue] and the unforgettable performance of Tim Currey as Wadsworth the Butler, your flash fiction or creative non-fiction piece this week should include the words “candlestick”, “scarlet”, and “library”. The words can be in any context you wish, and you have 250 words (247 of which you can choose yourself).

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8 comments on “RWH: Clue”

  1. barbara @ de rebus

    Excellent piece! I love the word choice with “tummy” – perfectly apt!

    One question towards the end:

    “her father’s favorite board game.

    It had been Miss Christine’s mom’s favorite board game too.”

    Do you mean it was Matilda’s mother favorite game? I ask because it was Miss Christine’s MOM, too.


  2. Wisper

    I am impressed! One, that you were able to incorporate the prompt into your ongoing piece and two, that you did it so seemlessly. I love the language choice for Matilda.

  3. Kathleen Basi

    I haven’t read the earlier pieces, and Barbara’s comment above made me realize how much more there is to this story. Nice job giving us a complete scene that stands alone despite being part of a larger work.

  4. Annabelle

    Oh, poor kid. You did a great job of capturing that sort of heightened horror that kids can feel at moments of pressure like that.

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