RWH: Do you believe in fate?

Agnes swayed the porch swing, gently pushing her toes into the wood to keep the slow movement going. She closed her eyes, lulled by the gentle sway and the cool summer breeze.

“Marilyn?”

“Yes, Aggie?”

“Do you believe in fate?” She opened her eyes, looking at the elder woman sitting in her wicker chair.

“I believe that God has a plan for us all. What about you, dear?”

“I don’t know. I mean, I feel like I’m meant to be here – now – with you and Tomas. It feels like I was supposed to end up here at this moment in my life. But if everything is predestined, then what about the bad things I’ve done? I haven’t always been a good person.”

“Just because God has a plan for us, doesn’t mean that your life is set in stone from the moment you are born. He gave us choice. Sometimes we might make an unfavorable choice, but if you believe in His love and have faith in Him then you will be steered back onto the right path.”

Agnes thought about this for a while, rocking herself back and forth as Marilyn continued knitting what would eventually be a scarf.

“I don’t think I can believe in fate.”

Marilyn looked up from her knitting, watching Agnes with curious eyes.

“I don’t think I can believe in God.”

Marilyn’s brow furrowed and she returned to her knitting.

“Because if I did, then Matilda was doomed before she was even born.”

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This piece was written as a part of my fictional work-in-progress, Finding Agnes. You can find more from Finding Agnes here.

Red Writing Hood is a weekly writing meme from the Write on Edge community. Constructive criticism is appreciated.

 

 

This week’s Red Writing Hood prompt: Write a fiction or creative non-fiction piece where fate plays a prominent role. You can write from the position of a complete belief or absolute disbelief in the role of fate in our lives or the lives of our characters. You have 400 words to play with.

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5 comments on “RWH: Do you believe in fate?”

  1. Wisper

    Another wonderful installment in Agnes’s story. I love the way you captured the question we all ask so often in this scene.

  2. Mandy

    Oh! The pain at the end of this. I liked the ease and gentleness of the conversation, how you incorporated peaceful pieces to make a whole that was more powerful.

  3. Jennifer

    The rhythm of this piece is almost exactly to the beat of Agnes’ rocking. I thought that you brought up an interesting point, that we are often apt to pick and choice from the vast array of things to believe in. But that Agnes doesn’t have that luxury and thus is left with only one way forward.

  4. Carrie

    A well done scene. You,gave us a good look into Agnes character and what makes her tick. But she’s still uncertain I think, even with her bold statement.

  5. shelton keys dunning

    Oh OUCH! What an ending!

    Love the way this scene panned out. But Agnes does sound like someone trying to convince herself of something.

    Great take on the prompt, and very well executed!

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